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Stefanie
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Creative people come help please!!
I'm creating an invite for both my DH & Jared. We're going to do a surprise 30th and 1st b-day. (because Jared's b-day is two days after daddy's)
I already got the first part, which I really like. I just need help with the second part...I don't like how it flows...but this is the general idea of the invite...
We’re planning a
“Surprise Birthday Party”
and Rob doesn’t have a clue!
They’ll be food, drinks and music
so all we need is you!
Daddy’s not the only one
who’ll be having all the fun...
We’re celebrating Jared
who’ll be turning one!
Tia girls...
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Re: Creative people come help please!!
I think it is cute as is! 
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| Posted 4/28/06 3:00 PM |
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Re: Creative people come help please!!
I love it...it's perfect!
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Marcie
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Re: Creative people come help please!!
I like it the way it is
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| Posted 4/28/06 3:00 PM |
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lorich
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Re: Creative people come help please!!
Seriously...it's totally PERFECT the way it is! It flows perfectly and is sooo cute!
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LadyMaravilla
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Re: Creative people come help please!!
don't change it! Looks good!
You need my address right? 
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| Posted 4/28/06 3:02 PM |
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Re: Creative people come help please!!
PERFECT!
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| Posted 4/28/06 3:03 PM |
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Re: Creative people come help please!!
Cute, Setfanie!
I think I know what you mean about the rythm. . . the line "we'll be celebrating Jared". . .needs another couple of syllables.
Like if you said "little Jared", even if that's not the word you want, see how it flows better?
Message edited 4/28/2006 3:04:39 PM.
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Stefanie
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Re: Creative people come help please!!
Posted by LadyLainez
don't change it! Looks good!
You need my address right?
Yup!
Thanks girls...
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| Posted 4/28/06 3:04 PM |
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Stefanie
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Re: Creative people come help please!!
Posted by tourist
Cute, Setfanie!
I think I know what you mean about the rythm. . . the line "we'll be celebrating Jared". . .needs another couple of syllables.
Like if you said "little Jared", even if that's not the word you want, see how it flows better?
yes...I think that I'm missing some syllables and it's too short...
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Re: Creative people come help please!!
Posted by Stefanie
They’ll be food, drinks and music
I love it as it is.
I'm having a little problem with this line....shouldn't it be...
There instead of They
Message edited 4/28/2006 3:05:49 PM.
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LadyMaravilla
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Re: Creative people come help please!!
There instead of They
Yes, there will be
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skprmiss
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Re: Creative people come help please!!
Posted by tourist
Cute, Setfanie!
I think I know what you mean about the rythm. . . the line "we'll be celebrating Jared". . .needs another couple of syllables.
Like if you said "little Jared", even if that's not the word you want, see how it flows better?
I agree with this...you might want to say "who will be turning one"
other then that ...sounds cute!!!
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mommy2bella
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Re: Creative people come help please!!
How about...
Daddy’s not the only one
who’ll be having all the fun...
We’re celebrating little Jared's very first birthday
that's right, he's already turning one!
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| Posted 4/28/06 3:07 PM |
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Stefanie
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Re: Creative people come help please!!
That's cute too!!!
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BabyAvocado
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Re: Creative people come help please!!
I think it's cute!! But I know what you mean about the rhythm...maybe this will help?
Daddy's turning thirty
And that's alot of fun
But come for Jared too
because he'll be turning one!
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Re: Creative people come help please!!
Posted by BabyAvocado
I think it's cute!! But I know what you mean about the rhythm...maybe this will help?
Daddy's turning thirty
And that's alot of fun
But come for Jared too
because he'll be turning one!
I like this for the second part
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| Posted 4/28/06 3:20 PM |
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Stefanie
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Re: Creative people come help please!!
I think that's great!!!
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| Posted 4/28/06 3:20 PM |
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AimeeE2006
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Re: Creative people come help please!!
Love Babyavacado's version - short and sweet!!
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| Posted 4/28/06 3:22 PM |
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Re: Creative people come help please!!
awesome
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Re: Creative people come help please!!
Posted by BabyAvocado
I think it's cute!! But I know what you mean about the rhythm...maybe this will help?
Daddy's turning thirty
And that's alot of fun
But come for Jared too
because he'll be turning one!
i like this!
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