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I'm seconding guessing on some wording for an e-mail that I'm sending out for work -- Can you take a look?
I'm in charge of getting all the RSVP's to this summer outing they're having at work and I'm second guessing the wording, since its going to the Partners, Associates, etc. on our Team.
Please take a look...
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Reminder: RSVP to the Summer Outing by 6/19/06
MESSAGE:
Hello All,
Just a gentle reminder, to RSVP for the Summer Outing by Monday, June 19th. When responding please include the number of persons attending.
Thank you,
[my name]
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Re: I'm seconding guessing on some wording for an e-mail that I'm sending out for work -- Can you take a look?
Looks fine to me 
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| Posted 6/15/06 10:59 AM |
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Smiley
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Re: I'm seconding guessing on some wording for an e-mail that I'm sending out for work -- Can you take a look?
Perhaps...
"the number of 'people' attending"...?
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| Posted 6/15/06 11:01 AM |
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SweetestOfPeas
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Re: I'm seconding guessing on some wording for an e-mail that I'm sending out for work -- Can you take a look?
I would say "friendly reminder"
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| Posted 6/15/06 11:06 AM |
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DandN
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Re: I'm seconding guessing on some wording for an e-mail that I'm sending out for work -- Can you take a look?
You dont need a comma after gentle reminder - and I would put a comma after "when responding" - otherwise it looks fine!
Message edited 6/15/2006 11:24:03 AM.
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| Posted 6/15/06 11:23 AM |
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Re: I'm seconding guessing on some wording for an e-mail that I'm sending out for work -- Can you take a look?
Thanks
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| Posted 6/15/06 2:39 PM |
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MrsERod
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Re: I'm seconding guessing on some wording for an e-mail that I'm sending out for work -- Can you take a look?
Posted by Question
I'm in charge of getting all the RSVP's to this summer outing they're having at work and I'm second guessing the wording, since its going to the Partners, Associates, etc. on our Team.
Please take a look...
SUBJECT:
Reminder: RSVP to the Summer Outing by 6/19/06
MESSAGE:
Hello All,
Just a gentle reminder, to RSVP for the Summer Outing by Monday, June 19th. When responding please include the number of persons attending.
Thank you,
[my name]
"Just a friendly reminder, the Summer Outing scheduled for (date) is quickly approaching. Please submit your RSVP by Monday, June 19th, and include the number of people that will be attending"
just a suggestion.
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| Posted 6/15/06 2:42 PM |
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LadyMaravilla
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Re: I'm seconding guessing on some wording for an e-mail that I'm sending out for work -- Can you take a look?
Posted by MrsERod
Posted by Question
I'm in charge of getting all the RSVP's to this summer outing they're having at work and I'm second guessing the wording, since its going to the Partners, Associates, etc. on our Team.
Please take a look...
SUBJECT:
Reminder: RSVP to the Summer Outing by 6/19/06
MESSAGE:
Hello All,
Just a gentle reminder, to RSVP for the Summer Outing by Monday, June 19th. When responding please include the number of persons attending.
Thank you,
[my name]
"Just a friendly reminder, the Summer Outing scheduled for (date) is quickly approaching. Please submit your RSVP by Monday, June 19th, and include the number of people that will be attending"
just a suggestion.
that looks good. 
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| Posted 6/15/06 2:44 PM |
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LIF Adolescent
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Re: I'm seconding guessing on some wording for an e-mail that I'm sending out for work -- Can you take a look?
Posted by MrsERod
"Just a friendly reminder, the Summer Outing scheduled for (date) is quickly approaching. Please submit your RSVP by Monday, June 19th, and include the number of people that will be attending"
just a suggestion.
Oooo I like that. Thank you.
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| Posted 6/15/06 3:03 PM |
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MrsERod
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Re: I'm seconding guessing on some wording for an e-mail that I'm sending out for work -- Can you take a look?
Posted by Question
Posted by MrsERod
"Just a friendly reminder, the Summer Outing scheduled for (date) is quickly approaching. Please submit your RSVP by Monday, June 19th, and include the number of people that will be attending"
just a suggestion.
Oooo I like that. Thank you.
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| Posted 6/15/06 3:04 PM |
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LIF Adolescent
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Re: I'm seconding guessing on some wording for an e-mail that I'm sending out for work -- Can you take a look?
Should I send it to everyone who was invited?
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Just the ones that didn't respond?
But, some of ones who responded didn't include if they were brining a guest.
Should I assume they aren't if they didn't say?
Or should I add something like...
Just a friendly reminder, the Finance Group Summer Outing scheduled for Tuesday, June 27th is quickly approaching. Please submit your RSVP, if you haven't already done so, by Monday, June 19th, and include the number of people that will be attending.
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| Posted 6/15/06 3:10 PM |
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SweetestOfPeas
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Re: I'm seconding guessing on some wording for an e-mail that I'm sending out for work -- Can you take a look?
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Should I send it to everyone who was invited?
-or-
Just the ones that didn't respond?
But, some of ones who responded didn't include if they were brining a guest.
Should I assume they aren't if they didn't say?
Or should I add something like...
Just a friendly reminder, the Finance Group Summer Outing scheduled for Tuesday, June 27th is quickly approaching. Please submit your RSVP, if you haven't already done so, by Monday, June 19th, and include the number of people that will be attending.
I would send it to everyone
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| Posted 6/15/06 3:13 PM |
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LIF Adolescent
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Re: I'm seconding guessing on some wording for an e-mail that I'm sending out for work -- Can you take a look?
I did get more responses but I'm still waiting for 31 more people to RSVP. The venue would like the count 1 week before the event.
What should I say in another Reminder e-mail with out being a nuisance? Or should I say the same, but with Reminder #2 on it?
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| Posted 6/19/06 3:53 PM |
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Susan
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Re: I'm seconding guessing on some wording for an e-mail that I'm sending out for work -- Can you take a look?
Second and Final Reminder
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nrthshgrl
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Re: I'm seconding guessing on some wording for an e-mail that I'm sending out for work -- Can you take a look?
Subject: Last Chance to RSVP
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