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Grammar Experts I need your help.
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MrsMaz
Best "THINGS" in my life.
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Grammar Experts I need your help.
Please tell me how this should be punctuated etc...
TIA
My day was really special
this is oh so true
surrounded by lots of people
that love me just like you
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Posted 8/25/07 6:34 PM  |
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randella
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Re: Grammar Experts I need your help.
My day was really special,
this is oh so true.
Surrounded by lots of people,
that love me, just like you.
or you can add an em dash instead of the coma before just.
Message edited 8/25/2007 7:44:08 PM.
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| Posted 8/25/07 7:43 PM |
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Goobster
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Re: Grammar Experts I need your help.
Are you trying to write a rhyming poem?
If so, I would say....
My day was really special,
this is oh so true.
Surrounded by lots of people
who (not that) love me,
just like you.
I would say, people who love...
not people that love.
If not a poem, I would put a period after special and make the next line another sentence.But I am not sure if this is the most correct way to write this. This is just how I would do it.
Message edited 8/25/2007 8:03:09 PM.
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| Posted 8/25/07 8:00 PM |
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klingklang77
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Re: Grammar Experts I need your help.
Posted by Goobster
Are you trying to write a rhyming poem?
If so, I would say....
My day was really special,
this is oh so true.
Surrounded by lots of people
who (not that) love me,
just like you.
I would say, people who love...
not people that love.
I agree. You can use 'that' b/c it is a defining relative clause, but who sounds much better to my ears. No comma after people, b/c it is defining relative clause and they don't need commas.
ETA- you can do what you want anyway, b/c it is a poem, not a standard sentence, and you have poetic license.
Message edited 8/25/2007 9:01:59 PM.
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| Posted 8/25/07 8:59 PM |
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